It’s great to see the imaginations of young children come to life. After some preparatory vocabulary work with a thesaurus, this is the piece of descriptive writing that student Athena Cheung wrote. She chose to write about her holiday.
I was impressed at the similes used and the wide range of adjectives. I had never thought of comparing my first time flying a kite with a baby bird’s first seconds of life! A very good image for a difficult first flight! Also great was the inclusion of sense descriptions to make for an altogether very evocative piece of work!
Keep it up Athena!